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Many cities experience a traffic problem nowadays. What are the best ways to solve the traffic problems that cities have?

#cities #traffic
The common trouble many
people
 nowadays is the vast vehicles running the road and it is undeniably it causes
stress
 to a lot of
people
. In
this
 essay, I would site some ideas, how we can go out to
this
 issue.
First
, the government have a big factor in solving
this
 problem since they have the power and authority to implement
such
 rules. One of the things they could do is to make more railways and provide underground trains that the
people
 could have a choice to ride public transportation than driving their own cars.
Also
,it can help them financially that they could save money more.
Furthermore
, it's convenient to ride than to drive.
For example
, you are tired and
stress
 with your work in your workplace and you're far from home,
people
 would prefer to take buses or metro than driving your own. They can rest or sleep while travelling.
Secondly
, railways and skyways would help to reduce
such
 difficulties. More roads, more cars run without
stress
 with the traffic, they could have enough space and easy to get to where they would want to.
Furthermore
, it could be helpful if each individual would pay taxes honestly. Apparently, we are hard-headed.
Therefore
, let us help one another to contribute to what is best for everyone. It is not a problem that can be solved overnight or one person can do it. It needs cooperation and unity. In conclusion, if our officials will strictly implement
such
 rules and
people
 will obey it,
then
 we can have
stress
 free life.
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