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In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your opinion.

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Population
 management has been a reason for concern since ages. These days rise in the
life
-span of living beings can be evidently observed in various nations. In my opinion,
this
 development can create a major disturbance in the living cycle of the world and
thus
, the demerits of
this
 development will far outweigh the merits. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both sides so as to showcase a clearer projection. On the one hand, it gives personal happiness by providing the opportunity to live longer and spend more times with loved ones.
In addition
, with raised
life
 expectancy people obtain more time to enjoy their
life
 with their friends and family.
For instance
, my grandmother is 90 years old and she wishes to live a few more years to see her grandchildren.
Therefore
, the chance to live more brings hope and happiness.
On the other hand
, an increase in the
life
 span of living can lead to a soaring
population
 issue.
Moreover
, with the increase in the living period, the death rates will decrease and it will
therefore
 create an imbalance in the
life
 cycle of the livings including human and various other species. To illustrate, millions of infants are born every minute and so it the figure for people dieing.
However
, if the ratio of demises decreases, the
population
 of living beings will automatically rise.
Consequently
, creating uncontrollable
population
. To conclude, even though, increasing
life
 expectance can bring personal joy, it can
also
 give rise to a serious issue of uncontrollable
population
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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