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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation Why ? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed ?

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In recent years, self-employment is aimed to become a popular choice for many civilians
instead
 of
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ompany or organisation.
Although
 being self-employed has some difficulties
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 investment, co-operation,etc, it
also
 has some specific benefits.
This
 essay will analyze the reasons and drawbacks of
this
 tendency. On the one hand, it is quite clear that being self-employed could have much more incomes in
comparion
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comparison
 with starting-salary of a company.
This
 is likely to meet the demand of the community in the industrial era. Taking some Vietnamese local brand like Bad Habits, Street Gangs as a
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. These self-employed firms do not only have
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uge
number
 of patrons but
also
 have good annual incomes. The reasons
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 that they could adapt
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the tendency of people, especially youngsters by creating
a attractive products
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.
Moreover
, another reason is that they could trace their ambitions. It is aimed to be a milestone for them to reach their goals. Bill Gates, the father of Microsoft, stopped study to be a lawyer and followed his passion that creating
softwares
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software
.
Finally
, he has achieved whatever he wants.
On the other hand
, being self-employed is risky.
In other words
, whether they could get a
number
 of profits or
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 bankrupted is still blunt.
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Furthermore
, they
also
 need some investments to run their works.
However
, it is quite difficult to be invested due to
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ack of trademark and trust.
Additionally
, it is likely that they need a sustainable budget when being self-employed. It does not only spend money
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 production process and materials but
also
 need money for
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dvertisement to have a
number
 of customers. Another disadvantage people who are self-employed could meet is that they have to compete with some well-known firms in the same
bussiness
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business
 aspects. It is absolute that huge companies have
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etter quality of products and trademarks so there are a
number
 of difficulties that being self-employed should solve as a
results
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result
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. In conclusion, being self-employed could help people achieve enormous goals as well as
fullfill
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fulfil
 their ambitions.
However
, they should prepare themselves for a quite
number
 of difficulties
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 their ways as budget and high-pressure of competition
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