Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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ountry while some people believe that other progress is important as well. I believe that economic growth matter than others for some reasons.

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to invest their economies. As we all know, if

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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sustainable development
social equality
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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