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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 of the opinion that economic advancement is a sign for their aim of
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ountry while some people believe that other progress is important as well. I believe that economic growth matter than others for some reasons.
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 of all, on the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that economic growth is crucial for
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ountry’s future.
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 to invest their economies. As we all know, if
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conomy is strength the
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economy
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economy of Germany is strong. As a natural result of
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, Germany’s education system is great. At that point,
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trong economy means
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uality education system. In short,
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nion should focus on their economic growth.
On the other hand
, some people are of the opinion that other developments are independent of economic improvement. Governments of some countries do not important to their cultural development,
science
, musical activities, and artistic performances. Undoubtedly,
science
 has become important in recent years.
In addition
, scientists can contribute to their
country
 in terms of economic progress.
For example
, Uğur Şahin and Özlem Türeci, who found the coronavirus vaccine, helped the
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's economic expansion thanks to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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