Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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comes to the environment, each and every person living in it contributes to it. Living in a civilized society,
one
has to adhere to
certian
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certain
morals, values and laws in order for a society to function normally. That means
one
should dispose
off
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his/her own trash regularly and
also
segregate individual components into recyclables and non-recyclables. But beyond that
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it
also
means
one
should be mindful of others' needs and look out for
one
another while taking others' perspective into account.
For example
, if an individual's neighbour has certain disabilities,
instead
of dismissing them,
one
should be proportionately mindful of them and be helpful.
One
can only grow when there
is
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mutual trust and respect with
one
another. While every individual has to play his own part in society and
imporving
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improving
his/her own environment, an individual can only do so much.
Governments
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on the other hand
, have a lot more power.
Governments
act as regulatory bodies that can shape the path for new advances in various different fields, including but not limited to- science, technology, economic growth and
finiancial
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financial
growth.
Governments
have a lot of
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decision making power based on the amount of data they have at their disposal. And unlike private
companies
, which mostly care about financial growth,
governments
regularly decide on policies which are for the greater benefit of the people and which may not necessarily make financial sense at
first
. Introducing new policies and institutions can shape the way a certain country can progress in various fields.
One
example I can recall is a '
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carbon
tax' for
companies
which emit carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases. In order to avoid increased overheads based on
this
additional tax,
companies
might seek alternate ways of manufacturing their products which in turn pave way for increased competition and innovation. Something like
this
can give rise to
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mass adoption of renewable energy sources which in turn help the environment by decreasing carbon emissions,
thus
reducing the carbon footprint of
companies
, and in turn households and the individuals too. After looking at the issue at hand from both angles,
one
can see that the problems at the individual level and organisational level are very different. But both of them need to be addressed appropriately using creative solutions, and only
then
one
can hope to achieve the intended end result.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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