Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

I consider that, as
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a human
right,
health
services
shoud
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should
be available universally and free. In Brazil,
for example
,
health
care is a constitutional right for every person and it is a State's responsibility to provide
health
services
through economical and social policies that promote preventive care, protection and rehabilitation.
However
,
that is
not a reality in many regions of the country and even in different parts of the same city.
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important factor is that as long as medical
treatments
advance, new technological and other high-cost resources are needed to offer proper
treatments
to an almost
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infinite
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of conditions. As a consequence, many people cannot receive
treatments
once the funds are limited and the demand grows.
Furthermore
, in the case of Brazil, people who have means
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ppeal to the Justice Department to enforce the State to provide access to expensive
treatments
and medicines and, in general, most of the verdicts are in
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of the demanding parts. As a matter of fact,
that is
a contradiction in many terms. As an example, in my personal experience, I only have access to
high cost
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treatments
in the public
health
system due to a condition that I would not be able to afford the treatment unless through public policies that
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medication and exams available and are not covered by my supplementary
health
insurance.
Although
these policies are considered
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enchmark to many countries, many basic
health
services
are still not available universally and
that is
clearly because of the public budget limits. Another factor that influences
this
deficiency is the
chronical
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chronicle
chronic
inefficiency and
corrupction
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corruption
in public
services
we face in Brazil. To sum up, public
health
systems do not excel at many
services
, but they are the only option that the most part of
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opulation
have
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.
That is
why I believe these
services
should be free and continuously improved,
otherwise
many quality of life indicators could never be improved and any country can be developed unless people could have access to
health
services
.
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