IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the present world,
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
environmental
problems
Use synonyms
 become more and more severe with increasing attention by
people
Use synonyms
. In
this
Linking Words
 situation, some
people
Use synonyms
 reckon that we should adapt
climate
Use synonyms
 changes, rather than protecting the environment. From my perspective, I agree that human should prevent
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
. The following essay will prove
this
Linking Words
 statement by discussing the negative consequence of only bearing the alter of weather and the true solution of
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the living circumstance will be much worse and even disastrous if
people
Use synonyms
 took no actions on restricting greenhouse gas emissions. Since there are growing needs for the fossil fuels that are using in various aspects
such
Linking Words
 as car engine, plastic production and other necessary usages, the annual emissions of carbon dioxide will increase exponentially.
As a result
Linking Words
, the ice glacier will melt due to
i
Add an article
an
show examples
ncrease in the temperature, leading to growth in the sea that will submerge coastal cities.
Thus
Linking Words
, the protection of the environment is vital and
also
Linking Words
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
prevention of destruction of human culture and population.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the best method to resolve
problems
Use synonyms
 caused by
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
 is to face the situations,
instead
Linking Words
 of escaping. If
people
Use synonyms
 are more aware of the severity of greenhouse effects, it would reduce greenhouse gases exhausted by the car engine as more
people
Use synonyms
 opt to use public transportation. As the advancement of technology is rapid and Earth has the function to fix the ecosystem and environment
problems
Use synonyms
, coping with the
problems
Use synonyms
 of weather is tangible and approachable.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the most suitable way is to restrict daily emissions until the cutting-edge technology has a breakthrough that can tackle the
problems
Use synonyms
 of
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
 directly and effectively. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we must address
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
, and I disagree that
people
Use synonyms
 should find a way to live with it. I hope that the
problems
Use synonyms
 will be resolved as
quick
Replace the word
quickly
show examples
 as possible.
Submitted by Esther on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
What to do next:
Look at other essays: