Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the present world,
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the
environmental
problems
become more and more severe with increasing attention by
people
. In
this
situation, some
people
reckon that we should adapt
climate
changes, rather than protecting the environment. From my perspective, I agree that human should prevent
climate
change
. The following essay will prove
this
statement by discussing the negative consequence of only bearing the alter of weather and the true solution of
climate
change
.
To begin
with, the living circumstance will be much worse and even disastrous if
people
took no actions on restricting greenhouse gas emissions. Since there are growing needs for the fossil fuels that are using in various aspects
such
as car engine, plastic production and other necessary usages, the annual emissions of carbon dioxide will increase exponentially.
As a result
, the ice glacier will melt due to
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i
ncrease in the temperature, leading to growth in the sea that will submerge coastal cities.
Thus
, the protection of the environment is vital and
also
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a
prevention of destruction of human culture and population.
Moreover
, the best method to resolve
problems
caused by
climate
change
is to face the situations,
instead
of escaping. If
people
are more aware of the severity of greenhouse effects, it would reduce greenhouse gases exhausted by the car engine as more
people
opt to use public transportation. As the advancement of technology is rapid and Earth has the function to fix the ecosystem and environment
problems
, coping with the
problems
of weather is tangible and approachable.
Therefore
, the most suitable way is to restrict daily emissions until the cutting-edge technology has a breakthrough that can tackle the
problems
of
climate
change
directly and effectively. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we must address
climate
change
, and I disagree that
people
should find a way to live with it. I hope that the
problems
will be resolved as
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quick
as possible.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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