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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is an irrefutable fact that many
nations
 have multi-culture societies in today's time. It is believed by some that
people
 from different
nations
 and culture make them
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ore attractive and beneficial environment for the host country. I completely agree with
this
 idea. In
this
 essay, I would shed light on some possible reasons for the support of my opinion. There are several reasons why the mixture of nationalities are helpful for the growth of the nation.
Firstly
, with the help of multicultural, country become the food hub for travellers. Which leads to a better
economy
 and help to gain fame.
For example
, India is one of the best food lands in the world because of there variety of cultures and languages. The recent study shows that food businesses have 50% contribution to the
economy
 of India from
last
 5 years. It's has made Indian an entertaining and economically strong.
Secondly
, Different
people
 have different abilities which help the nation to gain success in every field of work. To cite an example, Canada has one of the best driving skills
people
, who help the
economy
 in many ways
such
 as export and import and most of them from another country like India, Pakistan or Iran.
On the other hand
, some
people
 have contradicted view, As per them, It leads to many disputes in society.
For example
, If
people
 from various culture live together, they may be divided into different religions and create an unsuitable environment for living because in many
nations
people
 fight for religions. To conclude, I would like to state that mixture of nationalities is the demand of the modern era for the development of better society because
people
 come together and participate in the
economy
 of the
nations
 and make It an ideal place with their traditions.
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