People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Here is a controversial issue that why the public should remain
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condition. Some
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argue about
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issue that
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should be healthy for personal advantages, not
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ersonal duty on their society. Personally, I agree
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for individual benefits which related personal financial problem and their own achievement. In
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with,
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ersonal finance situation obviously demonstrates why keeping healthy is
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personal matter. Generally, according to advances in medical technology, most
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could take a surgery from a professional doctor, whereas its costs would be extremely expensive. So, to save their money,
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have to exercise with the appropriate activities.
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, obesity which one of the most popular diseases among adults would afford various complications, but it could prevent with the proper exercises.
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, it is convincing that
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problem is very related to
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personal finance so that the public does not need to concern about
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the citizen’s duty. Meanwhile,
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ersonal goal
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clearly explains the issue at hand.
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because, if someone could not finish the tasks until the deadline because of illness,
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phenomenon is not affected
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the society.
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,
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, a soccer player, who
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an ankle problem, had to give up his goal in which wants to be an international soccer player.
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, most
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tend to maintain
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condition for reaching their own goals. As shown
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the given cases, I am in
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of that healthy accompanies personal advantages. In conclusion, as
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glance, it may seem like the public has to keep their
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due to the citizen’s duty.
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, it is more likely to maintain for saving individual money and for personal purpose.
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, I feel that the government should exactly implement public advertising the reason why citizens have to keep
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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