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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The problems related to energy production and usage are increasing significantly. Governments ought to be responsible to promote other alternative resources to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels. I agree that if the administration takes appropriate actions for
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 issue it will definitely be beneficial. To start with, with the utilization of other power sources
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 as wind and solar, there would be reduction in environmental pollution. More than 70% of air pollution is caused by burning fossil fuels in cars and other motor vehicles in a place. Recent studies have shown that cell-powered vehicles are crucial to decrease the problem of environmental deterioration.
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, the installation of windmills will be an alternative way to produce electricity in urban areas which can reduce the consumption of coal.
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 be advantageous for deforestation. To cite an example, the Australian government is reserving specs in cities to promote wind energy which will help to produce electricity with less pollution.
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, the reduced prices of
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 which are going to replace fossil fuel must be reasonable, so that it can motivate them to use those
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. The government should make sure that
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 as solar-powered cars and other
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 could be bought by their all residents.
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, in Nigeria, solar panels are only affordable by rich people as a form of electricity which is not effectively going to work for the whole country to tackle these problems. In conclusion, it is clear that governments are responsible to use other available and less polluted energy sources that are
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 effective to solve environmental issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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