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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
Nowadays, young
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endency to have
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onnection with others online rather than to communicate with individuals directly in
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eal world.
This
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eneration of the young and will suggest
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ossible solution.
To begin
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teenagers
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people
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eal world, and
this
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people
 fresh experiences to broaden their minds.
Furthermore
, they can easily find new friends who have common interests and hobbies online.
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there are so many various communities which share their interests
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 websites. There are some solutions to inspire
teenagers
 to meet others directly.
First
, school authorities can provide students with exchange course with
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chool in other countries or districts, so that they can have the experience to socialize with new
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istinct culture from them.
Second
, if schools and local communities make various activity club in which
teenagers
 may want to participate, they would like to gather for their hobbies and make
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onnection with
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eal world. In conclusion, we can solve the case by providing
teenagers
 with the chances to meet new friends and the same interested
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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