In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?

A small number of youngsters see
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lassical
music
concert or play classical
music
in numerous nations. In my opinion, it is
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are occasion that a young man has an interest in classical
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now, and it is wrong to insist teenagers to acquiring skill in piano and listen
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classical
music
.
First
of all, a normal school student listens
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modern
music
and assume classical
music
is
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orthodox
. The children will not understand it, as it is out-dated only people living 400 years ago
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prefer
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choice.
However
, it does not
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its value today, as it relaxes our mind and body.
Besides
it is regarded as luxurious art, so wealthy and noble people prefer classical
music
and teach it their children.
For instance
, if we observe affluent noblemen in the UK, they are competent in
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iano.
Thus
, it is no wonder why the overwhelming majority of people do not like it.
On the other hand
, every child is not obliged to learn the instrument and listen
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classical
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, as everyone is unique.
In addition
, not every child will acquire skill in playing
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iano, as it does not appeal
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all youngsters.
For example
, it is said that a fish swims better than any animal in the water, but it would suffer if it gets obligated to climb a tree.
Hence
, children must make choices by themselves. In conclusion, from the answers and examples given, I firmly believe classical
music
is an old trend and not suitable for teenagers living in the
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century, and there is no meaning in insisting the young generation to listen
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classical
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  • Exposure
  • Perception
  • Old-fashioned
  • Elitist
  • Financial investment
  • Competing interests
  • Entertainment options
  • Digital music
  • Video games
  • Social media
  • Cultural understanding
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Affordable tickets
  • Free concerts
  • Music education programs
  • Modern adaptations
  • Collaborations
  • Relatable
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