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These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem solved?

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Nowadays, the number of people who are interested in teaching in high
school
 is frequently decreased.
This
 essay will discuss some factors that contribute to
this
 tendency and propose some possible solutions. The main reason for disinteresting adults to work as a
teacher
 is the salary.
Teachers
 earning is much lower than their peers in other occupations.
For example
, a lawyer's income is much higher than the money is earned by a
teacher
,
although
 the effort is put into the work is the same. To solve
this
 problem, the government should increase
teachers
' income at a competitive rate compared to other jobs. Another reason is that
teachers
 do not receive the expected respect from high
school
 students.
Although
teachers
 put lots of time and effort into their work, students deny doing their assignments and avoid paying enough attention to the course.
This
 makes
teachers
 to be disappointed and quit the job. In
this
 case, parents can be considered as part of the solution. They should encourage their teenagers to behave respectfully in class. The final reason for
this
 issue is
teacher
's working hours. The
teacher
's main responsibility is
to begin
 after
school
 hours.
This
 means that they have to stay late at
school
 to prepare the material is needed for the
next
 day's courses, mark the exam sheets and give feedback to assignments.
This
 problem could be addressed by decreasing the working hours of teaching to make teaching more satisfying for individuals. In conclusion, some reasons people prefer not interested in teaching at high schools have some possible solutions. Governments and parents must ensure steps are taken;
otherwise
, high schools face a shortage of
teachers
 in the coming years.
Submitted by Mahnaz Mahzari on

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