It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime is a direct influence of the increase in violence in media. To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

It is argued that
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nowadays

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now a days
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youngsters
youngster

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yongester
are consuming vast
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information

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infromation
from
media
such
a cinema, television,
media
and most important social-
media
.
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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i
totally agree with the statement as the violent content display in
media
make the teenager more offender.
This
essay will explore different role play by
media
to exacerbating the problem in juvenile crime. To being with,the
media
promote illegal and offensive activities. these day many movies, TV
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series

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servies
, Web Servies celebrate law-breakers and they
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portray

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potray
criminal
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activities

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activies
as
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word advantours.

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a
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adventures
adventure

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advantours
and fun.
As a result
, it
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encourage
encourages

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encourange
the kids to break the law and get involved in illegal activities. Recently, there was
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apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun news in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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a
news of 4 young boys were
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performing

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peformating
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stand
stunned

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stund
in moving train to record the video of the activity and share it on social
media
.Henceforth, other kids
also
started to emulate them and soon became a social
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trend
Trent

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trent
on social
media
.
In addition
to
this
,
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the

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m
edia
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is not censored
is not censoring

It appears that the form of the verb censor does not work with is in this sentence.

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is not censor
self-content. Videos and news of killing and attacking or other activities, which can be
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diverting

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diversating
effect on kids
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mentality
mortality
maturity

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matality
and presented without any thought.
As a result
, teenagers are more psychologically affected
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by

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with
such
content and get more prone to
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aggressive

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aggreesive
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behaviour

The spelling of behavior is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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behavior
. As an example, in a recent video showing a boy killed his
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girlfriend

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girlfried
for refusing to marry him. In conclusion,
Media
is promoting
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aggressive

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agressive
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behaviour

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behavior
through television, cinema, songs and various other
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ways

The adjective other appears to be modifying the singular noun way. Consider making a change.

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way
. If
this
tends is not reduced and corrected in time, it will have many negative
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effects

The singular countable noun effect follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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effect
on
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society

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sociaty
for a long-term

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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