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Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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In today’s contemporary world, a great number of parents force their
children
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 to be successful academically. There are various reasons for
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 situation, but most striking one is that the
families
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 want their kids to have a well-paid
job
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 in order to live a comfortable
life
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. The manner of
families
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 has an unfavourable impact on
kids’s
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 mental health.
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 wit, it is obvious that rivalry plays an undeniable role in every part of
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 all the world. Many parents are aware of the fact that their
children
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 should be more successful in comparison to other
children
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 at the school.
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, a student who has a qualified background are likely to find a good
job
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 and maintain a welfare
life
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.
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, when it comes to occupations, an engineer gains more money than a civil servant.
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, the pressure of parent about being successful leads
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a variety of problems in the
children
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’s
life
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.
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,
children
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 are expected to
fulfill
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 their parents’ goals which they did not achieve them.
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, kids will come across many responsibilities related to
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 ambitious and they definitely feel under pressure. Apparently, people who do not work in the
job
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 they like are likely to be unsatisfied with their
job
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. It is inevitable for people to develop depression and anxiety. In conclusion, many
families
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 believe that their kids have to be successful and outstanding in their lives. Owing a good economic condition is regarded
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the most important factor by
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.
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, these desire’s of parents affects
children
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’s psychologic situation negatively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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