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Some people think that parent should teach their children the discipline and wrong and right while other say they should nurture them in a good environment discuss both views and give your opinion

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Parental role in
children
's lives has been an axial function and should be given the foremost consideration. Some think that the main responsibility is to teach them the right and wrong, while others think that to nurture them in a healthy environment is the pivotal part. I am of the belief that the vital role is to grow them up in a safe and healthy home because
this
 prevents them from developing negative
behavior
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.
This
 essay will discuss both views. On one hand, guardians should teach their offsprings the sense of
descipline
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discipline
.
This
 means that they have to educate them
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several skills.
Firstly
, they ought to rever adult as well as their friends, carry responsibility and
alway
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always
 say the truth.
Secondly
, not only they instruct them discipline, but
also
 the difference between good and evil things. To illustrate, bullying is an immoral
behavior
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that is
 spreading among
children
.
For instance
, in schools girls bully other girls because
the
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 have curly hair or dark skin.
On the other hand
, despite the
above mentioned
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 ideas, nurturing daughters and sons in a good atmosphere is very necessary. To explain, the house should
contains
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 love, help, sharing and lots of
caring
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. When
children
 are provided with a good and safe environment, they will act in a perfect way in their social and educational lives. According to the Guardia news, the young who has divorced parents acts in
an
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 negative way
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life and develop negative
behaviors
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behaviours
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 toward others. In conclusion, I would like to restate my opinion that
although
 to educate
children
 the wrong and right is pivotal, to make them live in a healthy atmosphere has the priority; not to develop dreadful conduct.
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