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TODAY MORE AND MORE TOURISTS ARE VISITING PLACES WHERE CONDITIONS ARE DIFFICULT SUCH AS THE SAHARA DESERT OR THE ANTARTIC. WHAT ARE THE BENEFITS AND DISADVANTAGES FOR TOURISTS WHO VISIT SUCH PLACES?

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Many visitors prefer to go to
places
 where weather conditions are extreme
such
 as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. There are many pros and cons for vacationists who go to
such
places
 for holidays. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views. On one hand, there are many advantages of travelling to
places
 where the weather is difficult.
Firstly
, it aids in boosting their tourism industry where means of employment are limited. Most of the inhabitants can survive with the help of
this
 industry. Due to weather conditions, people are not able to get involved in other occupations. In
this
 manner, they are able to buy the essential items necessary for their survival.
For instance
, according to a report by Times Mirror, 45% of the people in the Sahara Desert are starving due to ongoing pandemic.
On the other hand
,
this
 kind of tourism has its negative impacts. The resources for survival at these
places
 are limited and tourists need to utilize these scarce sources which may lead to a crisis in the lives of the local population. They need to cut-on their needs and requirements to fulfil the needs of visitors.
For example
, as per the survey conducted by the National Health Mission, 32% of children are suffering from malnutrition in colder regions. In conclusion, while visiting
places
 where conditions are harsh can be beneficial for the residents because it provides them employment, it is important to pay attention to the costs as well which these residents need pay due to less essential items.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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