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Many people living in cities these days do not get enough physical exercise. What are the causes of this?

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People
, these days, who are living in cities are not paying enough attention to their health and due to which it is important to discuss to find a cause. There are two most common causes of an insufficient
exercise
,
firstly
, most of the metropolis are too crowded to find a place to do workout and
secondly
, due to the hectic lifestyle of cities
people
 ignore to do an
exercise
. Mostly, in the
city
, it is difficult to find a playground to stretch your body or play an outdoor game because downtown is built to occupy as many business buildings as they can, which take away the attention from authorities to build a playground or a landscape where the public can
exercise
.
Moreover
, when
people
 do not see a proper place to walk or play, they seem to get less inspired to do a physical
exercise
.
For example
, when I used to leave in the
city
 called Ahmedabad in India, it was very crowded as I mentioned in the above paragraph, due to which I never got inspired to do some drill. The family who resides in cities are too busy to focus on their health. Leaving in the
city
 is an expensive decision, and due to which
people
 are too occupied to pay their bills that they do not even bother to think of physical wellness.
For instance
, when a person lives in the
city
, it gets three to four times more expensive than living in midtown due to which
people
 have work and focus more on paying bills rather than spending time for their own wellness. In conclusion, the main cause of
people
 getting insufficient action is because of a lack of facilities to do workout and a hectic lifestyle
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • desk-bound jobs
  • fast-paced urban life
  • conveniences
  • physical exertion
  • barrier
  • densely populated
  • pollution
  • safety concerns
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian areas
  • cycle lanes
  • accessible
  • workplace wellness programs
  • subsidize
  • financial barriers
  • public awareness
  • incorporate
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