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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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In recent studies shown that there is more and more tourist spent their holidays in very extreme conditions
such
 as Sahara desert or The Antarctic. Most of the
people
 choose
such
 kind of destination by a passion to achieve something or to get more confidence. Travelling to an extreme condition has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the benefits of
such
 journeys is you push yourself to survive in a difficult situation to improve one’s confidence. There is a lot of physically and mentally challenging situation in the journey like a sudden change in weather condition, dangerous roads and a lot of adventure activities to boost your morale and self-confidence. Nowadays
people
 are more inclined towards the adventure holidays as they know that risk what risk is associated with it and Government are
also
 motive
people
 for adventure tourism. On the other side,
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ifficult journey is very dangerous and it goes against your plan. Most of the tourists are not able to survive in
such
 extreme climatic condition and due to
this
 loss of life. Mountaineer doing trekking and get it injured
although
 they have proper safety measures and professional guidance. Another drawback is that
people
 are missing their way and find themselves in dangerous situations and the government has to start costly rescue operation to search them. In conclusion, I want to say that journeys in
such
 extreme conditions are very adventurous but
on the other hand
 it is very dangerous. One has to know their limits while planning
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acation in where conditions are very extreme.
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