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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree ?

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In today's contemporary world, the majority of
people
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 eat junk
foods
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 all around the world. It seems that unhealthy
foods
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 lead to inevitable health problems. Many
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 are of the opinion that the best way to address
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 adverse situation is to prohibit
people
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 from eating fast food. I firmly believe that society needs the help of the government to become a healthier generation.
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 with, it is obvious that the
people
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 who have unhealthy eating habits damage their bodies mentally and physically.
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, these
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 do not have control over their eating habits. As result,
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 consuming harmful
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 are likely to gain weight and become obese. The government should take some logical precautions in order to confine the obesity epidemic among the
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.
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, the authorities must ban selling the
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 which pose a threat to human health.
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, advertisements have an outstanding influence on
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, especially teenagers. Adds with junk
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 tempt young
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 to consume fizzy drinks and food with additives. many teenagers have a tendency to purchase these
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 in order to protect their budget. Because unhealthy
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 are reachable and cheaper in comparison to others.
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, the governments have to remove adds which encourage individuals to consume harmful products. To conclude, when it comes to eating habits, there are various harmful effects of junk
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. A great number of
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, including me, claim that the governments should take an action in order to obstacle
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 common mistake by advertisements and banning to sell fast
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.
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