Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, most of the
people
around the world are going through hectic workload and tight schedules due to which it is believed that
communication
among the members of the family has been
decraesed
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decreased

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over a
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, it is considered declined,I
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do not
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think it is decreasing.
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essay will describe the reasons behind it with
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ew examples of it.
To begin
with, due to the unprecedented advancement in technology ,the internet has become boon for everyone which has increased the rate of
communication
significantly. It means ,
people
spend far more time in phone calls and video calls than in the past. To instantiate, a person can be in touch with his family while being on his workplace or from distant places.It is irrefutable that physical co-ordination has decreased for
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ew years, which
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really mean
communication
has decreased.
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, when I was in
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the
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ostel during my
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schooling

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I used to
visit
my parents only once n a month but now I communicate with them
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twice a day via video and audio call.
Therefore
, in
this
cutting edge era,
i
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the

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nternet has helped
people
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immensely

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to be in touch with their parents and siblings in every now and
then
.
In addition
, The breakthrough of fastest moving means of travelling has
also
played
s
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ignificant role in increasing
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communication
. In another way , there were very few vehicles , which were
slow moving
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due to which
people
didnot
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use to
visit
their home frequently. But, In present days we can find aircraft ,
fast moving
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trains and
other vehicle
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as well.due to which we
visit
them more often. To illustrate
this
, in
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ast
people
had to wait for
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a

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ong vacation just to meet their parents ,
In contrast
to which
people
can
visit
their home even in a weekend nowadays.
Hence
,
f
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astest means of commuting vehicles are assisting on increasing the
communication
in
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arger extent in comparison to
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ast. All in all,
Although
it is believed that the interaction between family members has been dropped , I
donot
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do not
don't

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agree with
this
.
Invention
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of more sophisticated techniques like internet and
aircrafts
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aircraft

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have made it more frequent and common than in the past.
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