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In several years many languages have died out. Some say it is not important because if we speak fewer languages, life would be easier. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that numerous
languages
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 are disappearing annually due to the great influence of globalization and modernization. I believe
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 phenomenon makes life much easier and more convenient for the following reasons.
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 with, the disappearance of minority
languages
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 helps
people
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 to integrate into the modern world. A
language
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 is in danger and even on the verge of extinction because it is only being used by a small group of
people
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. Most of
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languages
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 are spoken by tribes and they may be aware that their
language
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 does not have a global function. With common
languages
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, they can have better access to educational opportunities and economic developments.
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, their living standards can be improved. Some
people
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 would argue that a
language
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 helps to preserve the
culture
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, tradition, and history of the community speaking it.
This
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 is true to a certain extent but even when the
language
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 no longer exists, it is possible to gain knowledge about that
culture
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 thanks to archaeologists and anthropologists. Our researchers in modern time can decipher the manuscripts of cultures that have been extinct. The knowledge we have about the long-gone Mesopotamia and ancient Egypt civilizations is
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.
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, a
language
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 cannot be a method to preserve a
culture
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 because of globalization and modernization. Globalisation will bring all
culture
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 into a melting pot.
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, they will take in new elements and vastly change through time.
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, they will help to conserve the world
culture
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 as a whole rather than that of a community. To sum up, the disappearance of a
language
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 should not be of great concern and
people
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 should accept the fact that fewer
languages
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 in the world mean better communication and understanding among nations.
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