When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, In the modern world era
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some
people
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asy way. That’s why
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learning and adopting new skills and
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xplanation in the
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paragraphs “why we do not need old skills in our life?”.
Firstly
, there are some flaws in the old techniques.
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, some nations taking advantage of new
technology
to improve their methods.
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able to increase their productivity in any area.
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griculture sector
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if farmers keeping using old fashion techniques for growing crops.
Then
, they are not able to increase their production.
Moreover
, they will
also
contribute to the pollution and degradation of the soil etc. So, they have to use new equipment’s and methods if they want to increase
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productivity and less participation in the
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pollution.
Secondly
, if
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on outdated skills to support current
technology
.
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, they are not able to think or update
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technology
. So, they have to think and try new things to create
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etter life quality. It can only be achieved by updating our current tech with applying new solutions.
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air pollution every year because we stuck on the old pattern of doing things. That’s why countries bringing more electric vehicles for transportation and
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oming years.
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, elder
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urrent community. If they are not going to do
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to communicate with
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urrent generation.
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, some elders still have old mobiles and laptops are not fast enough to do any task nowadays. That’s why they have to choose new hardware to complete their task in
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roper way.
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the end, I want to suggest that we have to change our ways so we can live
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ood life in easy and create
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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