Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays there is a lot of advertisement that encourage people to buy a
product
that really does not need and not use in their daily routine. Some commercials encourage us to buy a
product
with examples so that people are more inclined to buy a
product
. In my opinion,we do not buy
such
items that we need not use in our daily regime. To commence with that I have seen a newspaper commercial of an electronic lighter with a beautiful image on it and it is clearly illustrated that how we can use those goods in our daily routine and three years back I had bought that lighter with so much excitement. Once I received the same I only used three to four times only. The reason behind was we need to charge his battery every day and it is not a user-friendly
product
.
Furthermore
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I have to add,
T
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the

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V commercial is more effective to encourage people to buy a
product
because they showed us the live performance of the
product
. Once I had made a purchase of a manual vegetable juicer after seen the advertisement on TV. Not used that
product
very frequently because it is not properly stable on any surface. Lately
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I want to share one more experience about mouth to mouth advertising directly through sales executive. They convinced me to buy an electronic photo frame and
moreover
,they are not giving me full information about the
product
and after a few days
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I recognised that screen is blurry and made a complaint about the item. In conclusion, Advertisements help us to choose the best
product
available in the market but we have to very conscious about the purchase. Ask a question to yourself that
product
is really helpful to my family?
,
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By using that
product
my will my lives improve and easy? We need to think about certain questions before purchasing
of
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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