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Nowadays, many people buy household goods (like television, rice cookers, etc). do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, the number of
people
 who can afford
household
goods
such
 as television and vacuum cleaners is higher than it was in the past.
This
 is because those apparatus is cheaper than it was some years ago. In my opinion, it is extremely positive how those products have become more affordable and
this
 essay will present arguments to support my thought.
To begin
 with,
household
goods
 make
people
's
life
 more enjoyable. Some of those products have a lot of interesting features that it is unimaginable to live without it. Television,
for instance
, has so many good contents that one could spend hours watching without noticing the time passing by. There are numerous different channels and
people
 can choose what they like to watch.
People
 can use television even to learn new subjects through youtube.
Furthermore
, it is surprisingly positive how some of those
household
goods
 have helped
people
 to do some difficult and time-consuming activities.
Therefore
, I believe these apparatus have made
people
's
life
 ease. To illustrate, vacuum cleaners is one equipment that I consider as essential. Doing activities that were so boring,
such
 as cleaning the dust, has become even funny.
Finally
,
people
 have been working so hard recently, that every piece of equipment designed to make
people
's
life
 more easy and entertaining I consider as a positive development. To sum up,
household
goods
 are not only positive development but
also
 essential. Those equipment have made
people
's
life
 easier than it was in the past. I suggest that the government reduce tax on those products to allow more
people
 to buy it.
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