In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a local resident of a community where you invest a certain amount of money into local children’s
sports
team or
open air
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concerts. I am writing
this
letter to share my feedback with you.
Firstly
, I would like to say that investment in
sports
for local children’s is very beneficial in many ways
such
as children will be more inclined towards the outdoor
sports
instead
of doing the indoor activities
moreover
,
as a result
,we will get good players who perform in national level championships.
Secondly
, there are some benefits to
open air
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concerts. Here we can indulge a large group of people from the community to take participate and enjoy along with that in concerts your company can earn money in form of charging for food and beverages.
Lastly
, according to me, the company should invest his time and money for sponsoring the
sports
team for two years so that benefits directly go to children. Once the children’s will perform their families are very overjoyed and cheerful. Thanks and regards Mandeep Singh

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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