Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technological advancement has brought drastic changes in the lifestyle of

people

. While many opine that these development has made

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mankind less social, I completely

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disagree

agree

with

this

view as I feel that individuals nowadays

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have become more social with the

upgradation

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up-gradation

of current technologies. In

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essay, we will discuss both

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sides of the argument. To start with, the latest inventions of digitalization and its amalgamation with devices

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as mobile and

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omputer has enhanced the connectivity of a person with the world.

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to say,

people

can now get in touch with

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their old friends and families through

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nternet.

Moreover

, the ratio of

people

they can connect with now is far more than what it

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to be earlier.

For example

, during my college days when the internet and

facebook

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were not so popular, I could never speak to all my knowns because of lack of time and

unavailbility

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availability

unavailability

of the resources.

However

eventhough

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even though

, I am busier

then

what I use to be during my studies, I am more social than ever and, all thanks to these technological advancements.

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, due to these inventions

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some

people

also

tend to spend their time on surfing the World Wide Web or playing online-games

instead

of meeting their close ones.

In other words

, we should not ignore the fact that becoming social is a personal choice and the

accessability

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accessibility

of unlimited internet and

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volution of

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aming industry has created an escape for

such

individuals.

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, my brother always prefers playing online games over attending a family get-together. To conclude, I disagree with the

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latest

technology has made the

people

unsocial as being less social is a personal choice,

moreover

, these advancement has

truely

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truly

enhanced the connectivity of the whole world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In a nutshell
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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

293 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today single-use products are still very common. What are the problems associated with this? What are some possible solutions?

In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

In some countries the quality of life in larger cities is declining. Why do you think this is happening? What measures can be taken to stop it?