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Nowadays more and more people have access to the Internet. But constant availability of any information worsens people's memory and critical thinking skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #access #internet #availability #information #memory #skills
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It is true that the
internet
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 has brought a lot of change in our lifestyle. It is believed
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 advanced technology has caused in terms of two ways, which is the individual's memory skill and crucial thinking.
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 with, there are some reasons that I agree with is the
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 has influenced the development of our brain.
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 powerful technology can storage among of dates in the cloud drive that our brain would never reach it.
People
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 no longer need to
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 their mobile phone or address as there is plenty of software that can help. Before the
internet
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 invention, most individuals can remember several phone numbers or address of their friends or families. Nowadays, it is clear that
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 do not memory things as they are relied
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with the
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 to do it.
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, in the information explosion era, many
people
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 tend to watch news online or through their mobile phone. It is possible if the journalist might report the news without investigated in order to gain more click rates. In order to attract more readers that some of the information from the
internet
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 might be misleading the true stories or affairs that could be caused several impacts to
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society. Take an example of the covid-19 pandemic, there is much fake news that brought fear to the public, which has caused panic purchase on goods and foods.
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, modern
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 should improve their critical thinking when using the
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. In conclusion,
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 the
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 has brought a different lifestyle to our society, it can
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 impact in some ways that if we rely on it too much.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminishes
  • shallow processing
  • critical evaluation
  • misinformation
  • unprecedented
  • discerningly
  • intellectual laziness
  • interactive content
  • problem-solving
  • actively engaged
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