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Band 5.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsons where relevant.

The given plans illustrate how Beech
Farm
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 has been transformed between 1950 and the present day.
Overall
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, the
farm
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 has evolved from a predominantly agricultural site into one with a stronger commercial and tourism focus.
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 some original farming areas remain unchanged, several new facilities have been added, including holiday cottages, solar panels, a camping field, parking spaces, and a
farm
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 shop. In the southern section below the track, the vegetable, soft-fruit, and fruit-tree fields have stayed in their original positions.
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, part of the former fruit-tree area has been replaced by a new
farm
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 shop. The farmhouse and chicken area
also
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 remain in the same place,
while
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 the barn has been removed and substituted with holiday cottages. To the north of the road, the area previously used for sheep farming has been divided into two separate zones. The western part has been converted into a camping field,
whereas
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 the eastern section now contains solar panels. Both new developments include parking spaces adjacent to the road. These changes collectively highlight the
farm
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’s shift toward a more visitor-oriented approach.

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task response
Task response: You cover the main changes well. Add a short note on why changes were made and what this says about Beech Farm.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The plan has two parts. use more links like then, and also to show order and to connect ideas.
strength
You name the main new parts: holiday cottages, farm shop, solar panels, camping field, parking.
strength
The idea of shift to visitors is clear in the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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