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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsons where relevant.

The given plans illustrate how Beech Farm has been transformed from 1950 to today.
Overall
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, the farm has shifted from a primarily agricultural landscape into one with a stronger commercial and tourism focus.
Although
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 some original farming areas remain unchanged, a range of new developments has altered the layout significantly. In the southern section below the track, the vegetable, soft-fruit, and fruit-tree fields have stayed in their original positions.
However
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, part of the former fruit-tree area has been replaced by a new farm shop. The farmhouse and chicken enclosure have
also
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 been preserved,
while
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 the barn has been removed and replaced with holiday cottages. To the north of the road, the area previously used for sheep farming has been divided into two distinct zones. The western part has been converted to a camping field,
whereas
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 the eastern section now contains a large array of solar panels. Both new facilities include parking spaces adjacent to the road. These modifications collectively reflect the farm’s shift toward a more visitor-oriented and sustainable energy operation.

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Use a short intro and a close line that wrap the map ideas.
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Link ideas with small words like also, in addition, and but to show how things change.
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Keep the order clear: first describe south part, then north part, as in the map.
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Choose simple words to keep easy read while still true.
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Clear view of changes over time.
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Good use of facts from the plan to compare.
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Good flow from one idea to the next.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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