Successful sports professional can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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professionals, once successful, earn more money than people in other important professions and while there is a view that

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is not fair, there is

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a contrasting view that it is totally justified.

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I support the former perspective,

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essay will discuss both views. While most important sectors that contribute to the development of any nation are agriculture, industries and services,

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is not

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a sector.

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do not pull any country from poverty while other sectors do.

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, while the contributions of Abdul Kalam as a president of India are more valuable to India than the services of Sachin Tendulkar who the greatest cricketer all times, the complete salary that Abdul Kalam received in his entire life is far less than the annual fees that Sachin Tendulkar charges for marketing BOOST Hot Drink beverage.

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, given the importance of other professions, the huge money being given to a few successful

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professionals is not justified.

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, If there are very few successful

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professionals per million people in a country

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in order to increase the participation general public into these games, some drastic measures have to be taken.

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may not hold true for all countries at all times but only some exceptional circumstances.

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, despite huge population and natural resources, the number of Olympic medals earned by Indians is very low and it is embarrassing to see Japan a nation which experiences 3 earthquakes every month overtake India in terms of the tally of medals received every year.

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, in order to avoid

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situations, some countries may provide a hefty sum of money to successful

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celebrities to encourage others to join

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and

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may look fair at that point in time. To conclude, successful players of every sport are gaining immense financial benefits when compared to small salaries obtained by people in other prominent jobs.

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in my view

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situation is totally unfair and there are some exceptions based on the importance a nation gives to a particular sport at a point of time.

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