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Band 7.5

Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter •mention the food and service •explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere •suggest any improvements to make things better

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my appreciation for the service provided by your staff members, which made my special day more joyful. A special thank you to your restaurant's chef, who prepared delicious and excellent cuisine, especially the Tiramisu dessert.
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, the hospitality was incredibly top-notch. We received our order within 15 minutes which is quicker than other restaurants I have visited. On top of that, the
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 of
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 place is unforgettable, I just fell in love with
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 creative environment, the soothing music, and the party nature. My friends and I had a fantastic evening, and we were so overwhelmed that we recommended our families for a memorable experience.
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, I would suggest reconsidering the lighting arrangement. The yellow lights generate excessive heat which might cause discomfort to your customers and raise the electricity consumption. Perhaps using cooler-toned LED lights could enhance the
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 being energy-efficient. Thank You for making my birthday memorable with your effective service. Yours Faithfully, Drashti Darji
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task achievement
While the letter maintains a good structure, consider elaborating slightly more on specific improvements to enhance the 'task response' score.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear and logical structure, with separate paragraphs for each point.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite, fitting the task context.
task achievement
The letter effectively covers all the task points, creating a complete and appropriate response.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appreciative, aligning well with the purpose of thanking the restaurant.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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