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Many people believe that global environment problems should be dealt with internationally rather than domestically. What is your opinion?

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A few people believe that global environmental
issues
 ought to be resolved by the collaboration of all the nations rather than tackling it locally. I fully agree with
this
 notion and reasons to strengthen my viewpoint are put forth in subsequent paragraphs.
First
 of all, solving several environmental problems in a particular location cannot give a fruitful result. As environment degrading
issues
such
 as global warming have no particular defined boundary, they can only be tackled efficiently by a joint effort of all nations.
For example
, resolving a problem of marine pollution by enacting strict laws for oil mining companies in one country might not resolve the problem if other
countries
 fail to handle the same as the ocean has no physical boundary.
Thus
, handling of
such
issues
 is only possible by international collaboration.
Furthermore
, under the influence of international treaties,
countries
 become more accountable to control environmental
issues
.
In other words
, a nation has global pressure of facing backlash in terms of loss in international trade if they fail to follow the strict protocols of any international contract. To cite an example, under the Parris climate agreement, some
countries
 are instructed to half their carbon dioxide emission by 2030. If they fail to fulfil, they may face consequences in terms of an international boycott.
Such
 treaties are encouraging
countries
 to move towards renewable sources of energy.
In addition
, under-developed
countries
 do not have enough
funds
 to tackle increasing environmental problems on their own.
Thus
, sharing of
funds
 from other developed
countries
 or international councils can resolve
this
 problem in a more systematic way. To illustrate, the United Nation reserves a large share of fund for poor
countries
such
 as Bangladesh, in order to provide clean solar energy to their citizens.
Such
funds
 by international organisations have proven to be quite useful for poor
countries
 in controlling greenhouse gases. To encapsulate,in my perspective, joint efforts of all nations can tackle rising global environmental
issues
 in a more organised way due to the restriction from international bodies as well as sharing
funds
 and resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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