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We are becoming less influenced by advertising now than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Advertising is a key to success for every business. The public is now no more affected by advertising than in the past.
This
 is completely understandable.
This
 essay will discuss why advertising is negative development nowadays. There are many factors to prove that advertising is negative development these days.
Firstly
, in the past, people are not aware of the products which are available in the market as well as they do not have enough option to choose.
Furthermore
, at that time many associations are doing advertising in newspaper and folk are used to buy those brand according to their needs. Those marketing were not fake in terms of
product
 quality. Companies are showing people actual
product
 and they do not try to convince people to buy their
product
. On the other side, many companies showing fake work on TV Chanel and newspaper. One best example to support
this
 point is, a big organization
such
 as fruit juice company are showing their
product
 with the help of famous celebrity that if you want to be a healthy life use their brand. Whereas
,
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 the truth is in that
product
 they are using lots of harmful chemicals, even the celebrity who promote
this
product
 is not using it personally.
Furthermore
, community are more educated and aware compare to past they know how these companies are showing fake advertisement. In conclusion, I would say that health organization should take some steps against these false marketing strategies. That would be the best way to deal with
this
 negative development of advertising.
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