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Even though doctors all over the world agree that the fast food is bad for people’s health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays we are more and more frequently forced with the problems of health connect with the rising consumption of fast
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nutritionists and scientists are totally convinced and never stop talking about
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angerous of
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 problem. They say that for the long run it will have terrible consequences,
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 as obesity and increasing hearts attacks. In my essay
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I will try to analyze
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 situation and express my point of view. I tend to think that the foremost reason why people are
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 so much junk
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 is their affordability. When you could purchase something delicious but a little bit unhealthy comfort
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 in any corner of the world,around clock, how long can you fight with your desires? On the opposite side of it,the conditions
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be
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 healthy and maintain weight are very demanding.Everyday responsible person who wants to be in shape and have
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good health must make an exceptional effort.Daily.
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 why,to my mind,most
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eople,are losing in
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 rival between our wishes and need for taking care of our health and body.To sum up it, in our modern stressful world with
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plenty of
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temptations
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 ordinary human have not enough time and opportunities enjoy varied diets and have
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 right eating habits. I
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 must admit that the processed
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usualy
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 is much
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cheapier
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cheaper
 decision on the issue of the eating and
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 much more frequency. How can we fix
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 situation? Frankly say ,I am not sure that humankind has to do anything with it. Most
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eople would like to live how they want,and if it means to buy and eat fast
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noone
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no one
 has to stop them. In my essay ,I have attempted to analyze the modern situation about fast
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 and have found that
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 it is not a problem,
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expectedly
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 I believe every person should accept
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 own position, makes
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wn choice and get responsibility by themselves.
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