Even though doctors all over the world agree that the fast food is bad for people’s health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadays we are more and more frequently forced with the problems of health connect with the rising consumption of fast
food
. Most
of
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nutritionists and scientists are totally convinced and never stop talking about
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angerous of
this
problem. They say that for the long run it will have terrible consequences,
such
as obesity and increasing hearts attacks. In my essay
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I will try to analyze
this
situation and express my point of view. I tend to think that the foremost reason why people are
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so much junk
food
is their affordability. When you could purchase something delicious but a little bit unhealthy comfort
food
in any corner of the world,around clock, how long can you fight with your desires? On the opposite side of it,the conditions
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healthy and maintain weight are very demanding.Everyday responsible person who wants to be in shape and have
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good health must make an exceptional effort.Daily.
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why,to my mind,most
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eople,are losing in
this
rival between our wishes and need for taking care of our health and body.To sum up it, in our modern stressful world with
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plenty of
temptetions
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temptations
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ordinary human have not enough time and opportunities enjoy varied diets and have
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right eating habits. I
also
must admit that the processed
food
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usually
is much
more
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cheapier
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cheaper
decision on the issue of the eating and
then
much more frequency. How can we fix
this
situation? Frankly say ,I am not sure that humankind has to do anything with it. Most
of
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eople would like to live how they want,and if it means to buy and eat fast
food
,
noone
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no one
has to stop them. In my essay ,I have attempted to analyze the modern situation about fast
food
and have found that
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it is not a problem,
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I believe every person should accept
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own position, makes
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wn choice and get responsibility by themselves.
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