Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a controversial issue that whether how to treat a bad

situation

. Some

people

argue that the public will be able to overcome

this

situation

via their challengable mind whereas others claim that

people

should accept those situations due to they have to maintain their family from financial difficulties. In the essay, I will elaborate on both aspects of

this

issue and discuss my opinion in conclusion.

To begin

with, family financial condition obviously demonstrates the main reason

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why the public tends to accept the entire

situation

, even though it is worse. In fact, most breadwinners have

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esponsibility to protect their family so that it is hard to quit their job just due to their personal problems, without embrace, they are unlikely to survive in their workplaces or in our society. As shown in these cases, most employees are inclined to admire the vicious

situation

On the contrary

, most young

people

usually tend to take various risks.

That is

because

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they do not have to care for other family members who require when it comes to education fee or additional insurance bills about health problems.

Besides

, they are too young to restart new occupations so that they can do easily more than elderly

people

Moreover

, frankly, when they try to break through some worse situations, the results are successful in their accomplishment very well and succeed in their new jobs.

Hence

, youngsters may seem like having no worrisome ground on new challengings. In conclusion, job dissatisfactions or the low amount of wage problems seem like there are no ways to overcome, but young ones usually have countered these issues and

finally

achieved their goals.

Thus

, if elderly

people

have a confident mind to attempt just like young

people

, they will be able to promote their circumstances so I feel that they should try it.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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307 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Complete response

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