Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

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rend ,either through the printed papers or watching television. Most of the folks follow
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persons making them a
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which I think is
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otally negative idea .
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issue and why do I think
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habit in a negative way.
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of all, superstar
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ajority of masses,
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to look like them. In
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, the popular
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like actor always plays the role of
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reat
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in their life, which might not be real ,
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, general public
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impressed by those activities and try to mimic them.
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arge number of people try to be like Rajesh Hamal and caricature him,who is so famous throughout the country because of his
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acting.
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,being a role model for
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ajority of the citizens is the main reason behind followed by them.
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,
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brings myriads of
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ill effects
in the society as the people are copying bad habits from them rather than learning to be hardworking, generous and dedicated. It means , the renowned
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on screen
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smoke cigarettes, drink alcohol which might influence the
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youngsters
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to do so and they become addictive.
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, the fashion style of the heroes and
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heroines
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is always being tried and often has worn by their fans which
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brought the undesirable change in our culture and tradition.
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, because of the impression got from their
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there has been found the more number of abusive
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as compared to past which is assisting to demolish our custom as well. In conclusion, there has been
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rend of
mimicing
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mimicking
popular personalities via the magazine and TV show as they are thought ass a
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for many people , which , in my opinion
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is
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bad for the welfare of society because it brings violence like drug addiction and there might be the entry of bad tradition in nation.
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