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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's world, admittedly the main problem is related to the condition of the environment since with rapid development of all spheres people have started to use and damage a lot of natural resources. These actions are likely to make temperatures to rise. 
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 of all, global warming can be caused by an increasing number of dreadful emissions produced by factories which, in turn, are likely to damage the ozone layer.
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 is because when there are holes in the ozone layer of the Earth it might lead to a disbalance in the atmosphere.
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, the climate might have a lot of changes and a temperature level is likely to increase.
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, in the
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 decade,an average temperature has increased by 5-7 degrees.  
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, in order to solve
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 issue,some measures have to be introduced, namely regulations and laws towards a process of production.
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, the government could sell
pollution
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 permits since it is likely to reduce the level of
pollution
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 because of the fact that companies will try to decrease their costs.
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, if the amount of emissions falls the impact on the atmosphere will decrease as well and it might stop rapid global warming.
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, when in Ukraine
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 permits were introduce the level of
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 fell approximately by 20%.  To conclude, a problem of increasing temperatures might be caused by a significant rise in the number of emissions. One possible solution might be a government intervention and the creation of new regulations,
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 as
pollution
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 permits.'

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