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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps depict information regarding the state of a park in the year 1980 and the present day. Overall, the park used to have
one
 main road surrounded by two areas of greenery,
one
 on each side. A fence was
also
 present at the beginning of that main path.
The
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space
's design became more diverse over the years as more amenities were added to it which attracted more people. In 1980, the path that led to the park was fenced in its
begining
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beginning
.
Moreover
, as
one
 walks through it, a pond with a sitting area can be clearly seen on the left side and many trees are present on the right. Obviously, only the remained unchanged over the years.
Additionally
, two paths that cut through each other replaced the old
one
.
Subsequently
,
the
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space
 was divided into four areas. The pond and seating area, which
were
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 the only thing that remained unchanged over the years, take up the most southwestern
space
. Just north to it lies the newly formed barbeque utilities and family
space
 with multiple
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tresses
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tress
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trees
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. On the
north western
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northwestern
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 part is an open
space
.
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