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It is better for college students to live in schools than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

#college #students #schools #home #parents
It is a common belief that college
students
 should live in
schools
instead
 of living at their own
home
 with parents. From my perspective,
i
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 completely agree with
this
 view for several reasons. The main reason why I believe that living in
schools
 is better for college
students
 than living at
home
 with their family is because they have no geographical barrier to attend
to
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schools
. By living
in
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on
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 campus,
students
 can travel to school more quickly because of near-distance, which can help them to save time for riding to universities. Especially for
students
 from rural areas,
for example
, have to commute a long-distance to get to
schools
. In
this
 way, they can be in stuck of traffic trams, which makes them spend hours commuting to their
schools
.
This
 increases the risk of being late when
attend
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 to classes on a regular basis, which can have a negative effect on their study performance. Another argument which should be considered is that college
students
 can have a chance to get out of their comfort zone.
This
 means that they have to do everything by themself, which can enable them to gain useful skills that
neccessary
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necessary
necessarily
 for their future life. To illustrate, when living far from their
home
, no one urge and remind them to wake up on time or do housework for them. In
this
 way, they are forced to adapt to new situations and
this
 can encourage them to become more responsible and independent. In conclusion, I strongly
belive
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believe
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 that parents should let their children stay at universities
instead
 of living at
home
 because of the time-saving and chances to gain
usefull
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useful
 skills.
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