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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

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Many individuals believe that
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 are not the main source of
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 and leisure nowadays. I totally agree with
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 since there is an immense amount of
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people
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 can find online and plenty of other options for entertainment. The main reason why
books
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 are not being used in the search for knowledge recently is that it can be easily found online.
Books
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 carry a vast amount of
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 but nowadays
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 are always looking for specific data and do not want to read a whole chapter of a book to find it.
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, they resort to easier tools
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 as Youtube and Google where they can search for the exact
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 they need in just a few seconds.
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, many professionals have online chat groups with colleagues all around the world where they exchange knowledge and
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 can ask questions about their work and have it answered without the effort of reading a book. As for the use as an entertainment source, today there are many other options more attractive than
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.
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 are constantly surrounded by different relaxing ways of enjoying their free time due to the advance in technology that made it possible for individuals to watch movies and play games on their smartphones.
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, especially the young public tends to spend all of their leisure time attached to a screen. To illustrate, a study from Harvard University showed that teenagers spend an average of five hours per day on their phones either playing games or
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 social media. In conclusion, I reaffirm my opinion that
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 are losing importance since
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 can find the
information
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 they need through other faster channels and nowadays they have more options of activities to enjoy as a source of entertainment.
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