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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The Global warming it is getting worse day by day which is a big problem for the humanity in the
next
 decades, for
this
 reason, should we spend
money
 now researching other
planets
 that could be a possible home or rather preserve our own and try to fix what we have done?
Although
 the answer is ‘No’, we cannot just close our eyes and pretend that nothing is happening. Different measures can help everyone to keep their life, which will be covered in the essay.
First
, it is undeniable that humans are killing the planet, exploring, digging and building, just to improve and get perfection. Today we have stunning buildings and houses,
also
 we have developed the most expensive cars and aeroplanes using technology which generate pollution affecting the whole system.
For example
, as latest researches,the temperature of the atmosphere has risen from 0.18 to 0.74 degrees Celsius in the past years, and it is estimated by various scientists that
this
 temperature is expected to rise to between 1.5 to 4.0 degrees over the
next
 century.
Second
, if we are going to spend
money
 to find other
planets
 why not spend
money
 on educating the humanity to preserve what we have done, and
also
 investing in plant more threes, reducing the pollution that we are creating, or if it is possible to go to other
planets
 it is possible to create a machine to clean the air and reverse it at all. To conclude, it is undeniable that our population are destroying our Planet, but at the same time a big part of the population are aware on what is happening,
therefore
 it’s possible to revert and fix what we have done. So in my point of view, we don’t need to spend
money
 now researching other
planets
 to live, humanity has improved but we still need much more to fix all of
this
 catastrophe.
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