The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Numerous characters deem punishing students physically is fading away and it is not apt for the modern age;
in contrast
, certain groups of people oppose and affirm
this
trend is practical in teaching pupils the basic manners. From my perspective, I reckon corporal punishment is
advantegous
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advantageous
than current teaching method.
First
of all, it is an inevitable fact that children do furious
teacher
's
homework
, but they do not spend time on gentle tutor's
homework
, meaning pupils learn from a strict
teacher
. Students get terrified by
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ngry
teacher
, so they devote energy and time and study diligently in strict
teacher
's class.
For example
, when I was in the 1st grade, my tutor used to hit my classmates, so every child did not use to sleep at night to do the
homework
. Attending class without doing the
homework
means he or she is
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.
Thus
, older adults prefer a strict mentor for their offsprings.
Secondly
, it is
also
an undeniable fact that a strict
teacher
's pupils behave morally good, while kids having no experience of being beaten up annoy everyone and called as an impudent child or spoiled kid.
For instance
, offsprings do not help their
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everyday job,
such
as cleaning
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ouse, washing dishes, ironing clothes if they were not scolded and beaten.
In addition
, students usually do not take good grades at school, but if
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entor hits them, they start to dedicate effort on lessons.
Hence
,
this
approach's virtues are immeasurable. In conclusion, from the ideas and examples given, I firmly believe punishing kids physically
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them learn manners and take good grades.
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