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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

#country #study #job #friend #lives #help #plans
Hello Raj, I hope you are in sound health when you receive
this
 letter. I do believe that your parents are in well-being as well as your sibling. Actually, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I have been accepted by your university, where you are studying.
Also
, I have received
study
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the study
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 plan in advance as there will be only morning sessions and
rest
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the rest
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 of the day , we've to organize ourselves how to do assignments and group study and all, so I thought of taking up the
part time
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part-time
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 as you know that we won't be studying all day. There are two reasons :
Firstly
, It would cover up my living expenses so that it would decrease the burden on my parents.
Secondly
, It would help to adapt to the new country's working environment. As you've been here for almost 2 years, you'd be aware of the jobs where they would fit my requirements. I would suggest you
to
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apply
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refer me somewhere as you know
my
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 requirements and abilities I have. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Nancy
william
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William
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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