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Some people believe that traditional medicines such as herbal medicines or acupuncture are more benefit than modern medicines. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, the tendency to move back to conventional methods of treatment has seen a long gradual increase. While some argue that traditional medicines are more effective options to tackle health issues, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement. The following essay will examine
this
 point of view, and I
also
 explain why I think modern XXX has more positive aspects.
To begin
 with, one predominant nuance which detracts from the beneficial aspects of conventional XX is that they do not have any scientific evidence of their
pharmatheutical
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pharmaceutical
 characteristics. To put it differently, a multitude of
herbal based
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herbal-based
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 practices came to us from old generations, where they were prescribed by people who even did not have any medical education, so the benefits of
such
 treatments were not analysed. As a case in point,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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