Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that, whether people have to accept bad situations or have to improve these situations. There is some justification to accept it, but try to improve to get better results.
essay is based on both the views and my view at
. There are several reasons in favour of my stance. To commence with, some of the people stick with their bad
and the situation is they can not quit it because of some family issues like poverty and other expense,
worry about unemployment.
For instance
, if they left the
it is not easy to get another
in a short time it makes them the table with the same office.
, some bad situations are beyond our power
as death, as no one can control it.
, skills and good education make a good route to get success in life. If
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a person feels unpleasant from
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ob , he should try to do more efforts to find another
with good skills. because every
sector wants a skilful person who can achieve targets in a short time.
, its hard to control death, but the illness can be prevented by doing exercise and other physical activities which make a person active and attentive.
As a result
, it makes a body strong to fight with diseases. To conclude, it is inevitable to accept a bad situation in life, while these could be stopped or reduce by doing some efforts and try to improve the negative into positive.
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