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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

#people #house #apartment
In
this
 era of fast-paced life,
people
 started migrating to big cities or to other countries for their special needs
such
 as job , education and business. Some of them choose to live at the home whereas others think living in the apartment would be more beneficial. Before making my opinion, I would like to discuss both arguments and provide suitable examples to support my views.
Firstly
, living in a home provides more privacy to the
people
 who don't want to live at the crowdy place.
Furthermore
, the home could be a better choice for families with pets and children as they can use their private garden to play as well as parents can have an eye on their children. But it brings some disadvantages
also
 like
people
 living in a house will be less social than the who lives in
apartments
.
Moreover
, the house will be more costly than
apartments
 as well as maintenance will be high. Living in
apartments
 is becoming a modern lifestyle.
Apartments
 provide more security because a security guard will always be there for security.
People
 will be able to interact with their neighbours. It is becoming the
first
 choice of
people
 who wants to stay for a temporary purpose as well as in comparison with the houses, it is less costly. In contrary to
this
 , privacy is the biggest issue as well as limited parking.
Moreover
,
apartments
 rent is increasing day by day. In conclusion, according to me , both living in apartment and in-home hold up their own advantages and disadvantages. It depends on individual choice and financial conditions and
also
people
 should consider all the factors before making their decision.
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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