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In many countries, people can eat a wide variety of food today. As a result, they eat food from other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of the development outweigh disadvantages?

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In recent years, there has been
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ramatic increase in the number of
people
 interested in tasting a wide variety of
food
. These
people
 are often called foodies and these
people
 eat different cuisines from other
regions
 than local
food
. There are both advantages and disadvantages associated with
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rend. To see whether the former outdo the latter, we need to look into both sides. Primarily, by eating different
food
varities
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varieties
, one can enjoy different cuisine and traditional recipes. On the one hand, with the knowledge
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 different types of
food
 items from other
regions
,
people
 can understand
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ulture of different
regions
. On the other, eating a variety of
food
 which is not local makes
people
 experience . Encouraging
food
 items from other
countries
 will
also
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wo
countries
. There are different
food
 festivals which
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 held by different
countries
 to let their citizens enjoy different recipes and make bilateral relations stronger. Examples of
this
 scenario can be seen in many
countries
 like
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nited States where
food
 festivals of different
countries
 attract thousands of the citizens and can make
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conomy stronger. Notwithstanding the
afforementioned
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aforementioned
adavantages
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advantages
, eating different recipes from other
countries
 is not without its concerns. The primary one stems from the fact that
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food
 items of other
regions
 are always expensive and not available for citizens under the poverty line. Not only rich
people
 can enjoy
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, but
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