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Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family, including uncles, aunts and grandparents, is better, rather than only by parents. Do you agree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples.

#people #children #uncles #aunts #grandparents #parents
There is currently a contentious argument over whether
children
 should be raised by all members of the family rather than only by father and mother. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion because being
involve
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 in the upbringing with
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hole generation of adults can lead to the arguments among relatives and bring some disadvantages fo the
children
. The main reason why I believe kids should be raised individually with their parents is
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children
 should see
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xample of their father and mother .
This
 is due to the future perspective for their life. As well as
this
, parents are the closest people to
thier
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their
 kids and they know what is
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best for their child. To
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, when your beloved child is having some sort of issues that he is not able to solve, parents are always here to support and show example and give the best advice to prevent any danger with
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their
 son or daughter. Another reason why I don't support the notion that
children
 should not be raised with relatives is that the uncle or aunt may not be the best example and
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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