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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Readily available food items have played a key role in helping individuals maintain pace with the demands of the present-day lifestyle. Even though it is easier to attain and it gives people some time to focus on their things, in my opinion, the adverse harms it causes does overshadow the benefits it has. On the one hand, convenience food items are easily available,
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 are sought after. One does not have to go through a lot of trouble in order to arrange a meal as these processed eatables are offered off the shelf.
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, “Ready to eat”, as it is often referred to, does not require to be cooked making it the go-to choice for someone who does not wish to be bothered to do so.
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, another reason as to why it may appeal to the masses is that, since it does not require to be cooked, it saves time. People who are on a time constraint can consume it and have their full, while still managing to not spend long hours behind it.
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, all these advantages come at a cost of a person’s well-being.
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, the consumption of
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 foods has adverse effects on health, as the nutritional factors in them are largely compromised. As an example, studies have shown that these eatables contain high contents of fats and sugars, which when consumed in large quantities, bring about a variety of health issues.
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, they play a key role in making individuals lazy. As attaining and consuming processed foods do not require many efforts, it motivates people to always opt for it in order to escape the hard work and
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 altering their mindset against putting in an effort. To sum it up, in my opinion, the cost of one’s well-being and a healthy active lifestyle are too big of a price to pay for saving some extra hours and consuming an easy meal. Due to
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, I firmly believe that the disadvantages greatly outweigh the advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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