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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a well-known fact that there are many different sorts of
languages
 in
this
 world, and some of them are disappeared every passing year. Some people argue that vanish of some
language
 will make a human being's life simple. In
this
 essay, the reason why I cannot entirely agree with
this
 idea will be written.
First
 of all,
language
 is not just a communication method, but it
also
 represents how humans in differents county see the world differently.
For example
, there are a considerable number of expressions of snows in Eskimo. In Siberia, snows are everywhere and every time. It looks similar or the same in foreigners' view, but in Eskimos' perspective, they can distinguish it into ten different types, and each of these has its names. In short, if the
language
 of Eskimo vanishes, it could not be replaced in other
languages
.
Besides
, the existence of diverse
languages
 is
also
 a benefit to the development of human brains. In short, for infants, most parts of their brains activate when they hear or say.
For instance
, some particular parts that are not necessary to learn their mother
language
 do not function any longer due to energy efficiency by ageing.
However
, when they start to learn other
languages
, the demolished parts re-activate. It is a reason that these are needed in a foreign
language
. To conclusion,
although
 some people would say that merging several
languages
 will be more convenient for many people, maintaining world
languages
' diversity is far more valuable than integrating it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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